"girl"

[Guest ThyraGP]

The girl begs the kind voice to stay.

Begs "Please don't go away".

But her pleas are all in vain.

And as she stands there caught in the rain.

Her mind wanders to someone she knows.

Someone who stays for her.

Someone who cares for her.

That girl thinks of her sister.

This was something I came up with on the spot while in a chat with my sister. I don't really think it's too good at all, but I'd like to know what you all think of it. I haven't written anything in quite a while, and I'm trying to start up again.

[Guest Donna Jean]

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Well, I like it, Hon...

Thank you for sharing it with us...

Huggs

Donna Jean

[Guest Elizabeth K]

Good - clear, honest thoughts... and it hit home, except 'sister' has a different meaning for me.

Lizzy

[Guest Opal]

Hi Jennifer,

I liked your poem! As you might have noticed, many of the poems here do not tend to get a lot of comments, but please do not let that discourage you.

Hope you will post more.

Huggs,

Opal

[Guest miss kindheart]

I like it Thyra

It is good to see that you found the poetry forum

I think it's it's the best

<<< hug >>>

vanna